Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences.

Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

Technology is playing an important role in schools and universities. While many people suppose that USING COMPUTERS, tablets and laptops IN TEACHING will lead to adverse ramifications BRING SEVERAL NEGATIVE EFFECTS, I strongly believe that an THE increase in OF technology is beneficial to FOR students and teachers.

On the one hand, there are some reasons why THE increasing use of technology, ESPECIALLY COMPUTERS, in education have HAS some disadvantages. Firstly, there are so many websiteS THAT contain a lot of documents for reference only and incorrect =>>> FIRSTLY, THERE ARE MANY WEBSITES THAT CONTAIN INACCURATE INFORMATION. Therefore, it is difficult to FOR students TO look for good VALUABLE AND HELPFUL information. Secondly, excessive usage of virtual connections might weaken person HUMAN’S relationSHIPS with reality. In fact, students spend more time ON looking at computer screens by themselves than interacting with each other. This results in soft skills such as verbal communication and empathy, is limited. THIS RESULTS IN A LACK OF SOFT SKILLS SUCH AS COMMUNICATION SKILL AND PROBLEM SOLVING

On the other hand, I believed that one of the advantages of an increase in the use electronic devices in education is a very worthwhile tool for education. I BELIVE THAT THE GROWTH IN USE OF COMPUTERS MAY HAVE MORE BENEFITS. To begin with, the internet has provided students with access to more information than ever before. Especially, THIS HELPS learners have the ability to research and learn about any subjects THEY LIKE by a button. Wikipedia is a prime example, where FOR EXAMPLE, THERE IS A WEBSITE CALLED WIKIPEDIA WHERE students can simply type in any keyword and gain access to TO LOOK FOR in-depth knowledge quickly and easily. In addition, most education systems are beginning to replace the notification forms papers pasted to the students by e-mail or instant messaging services =>>> KHÔNG HIỂU. Internet is a very fast and convenient way for students to get information. It is very useful because it help students for many purpose.

In conclusion, although computers have some negative effects on students, it seems to me that the technology has huge MANY benefits when we use in the classroom.

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